School Holidays
In the Holidays I went over to my aunty's house for the weekends and spent the time I had with them. After we were having fun we heard some news that we had to attend a funeral it was very important to my aunty's because they spent their time with her and she was known as my great Aunt also as my Grandpa Sister. We cooked as much food for the people who showed up and we all had a great time and finishing off the things we had to do. So I and my family spent the whole week helping out give the food and drinks and my Great Aunty was Named Vulase Fa'anunu and she was a Great Aunty.
Thank you
Hi Senitila! My name is Mia from Yaldhurst Model School. Great blog! Really informative, I really liked the way that you added in a lot of detail and explained everything so that way I and some other who are reading the post can understand what you are talking about. Sometimes, there may be some sentences or words that may be unusual or we may not know about it.
ReplyDeleteIt sounds like you had great fun in your holidays. I was very busy in the holidays, I usually have a lot of concerts and other events that I have to go to, I even had a piano recital! How many other events or activities did you do in the holidays?
To improve, I think that you could've added in some pictures or made some to go with your text and present it on your blog in a different way using something creative like Canva, Visme or Piktochart.
Great work!
Mia
Hi stenitlia. It'm Mikael from Yaldhurst school. I like how you have said what you did in the holidays. Sorry for you auntys lose. Next time I think you should try to ad a little more colour or some photos. Apart from that I think it is good.
ReplyDeleteHello Senitila my name is Shay and i'm from yaldhurst model school.
ReplyDeleteI like how you added a because so there's a reason you went to your auntys. Because some people don't add because. And I get very confused. BUt you did I enjoyed that story very much cant wait to see more like this. But I have one question why did you pick to do your story about you and your aunt did you do anything else.Because it will be cool to hear. But maybe next time you could add a different tile a more interesting one that will be cool.
Shay.
Kia Ora Senitila,
ReplyDeletemy name is Julia and I am a year 8 student from Yaldhurst Model School.
First of all, I am very sorry for your loss and I hope you are feeling a little bit better. At the funeral was it nice to catch up with some relatives?
I really like the way you added some colour to this and had a short explanation to your holidays. Short and simple!
To improve, all I can say is maybe add some photos or pictures etc.... apart from that this was great! keep it up.
What was your favourite part of your holidays?
Kind Regards
Julia
Yaldhurst Model School